Literacy: writing a balanced argument

Today we completed our balanced arguments about homework. My example is on the board above. I wrote mine in just under 10 minutes so it will not be as good as yours. However, I tried to remember some important points. I have written an introduction, a paragraph of points for, a paragraph of points against, and a conclusion. I have used connectives like additionally and moreover. I used a WOW word, consolidate, which means to make the learning solid so it sticks in your mind. I checked my spelling and punctuation.